[Folcon]

I've been weeding through some old files and my HD and Jump Drive and came across some of my old poems from a year or two ago. And after rereading them, I've decided to start posting a few. So, here's the first, enjoy.

The Art of the Sword

The art of the sword is a sacred thing,
To dance with one's blade, an art form.

I live by the sword; I die by the sword,
As I fight to defend those I love.
And get covered in viscera and gore.

When the battle is done, I go to the river
And wash the blood from my hands.

But the war still goes on.
A swordsman's life is never quiet,
His work is never done.

The art of the sword was once a sacred thing,
To dance with one's blade, an art form.

But no more,
years of war have left me barren inside,
I no longer feel love or joy.

I am no longer a hero in the people's eyes,
Just a killer, for now, and forever more.


I'll post another in a few days.

[pHantOm]

Do you own a sword, and if so do you swing it around the house pretending you're a samurai?

[Folcon]

Yes I have a sword, and no, I don't swing it around the house pretending to be a samuri. I'm to old for that....besides, I might break something.

[Laharl]

pHantOm, on May 19 2008, 08:23 AM, said:

Do you own a sword, and if so do you swing it around the house pretending you're Kenshin?

fixed XD

you missed the edo period by 200 years

not much 'poetic' about, try playing about with the syllable count and your vocabulary sucks

[Caael]

To me, it sounds like a pathetic attempt to plagiarize whatever anime you stole the storyline from and adapt it into poetry form, and you even failed that. It all seems like a desperate cry for attention. I've never been a fan of poetry, but this has lowered my my standards further. This isn't really your work, this is just a way for you to express your unhealthy love for your anime.

[Folcon]

Anime has nothing to do with it.

[Eugine]

omg, you guys are mean >_<

escout that was really basic for me lol. I like it kinda though...

[Folcon]

Thanks Eugine, at least someone has something nice to say. I try to write in free verse when I can, but often write in other forms. I'll post another tormorrow or the day after.

[Eugine]

There are needs for improvement though. It sounds way too childish o.o

[Folcon]

I'm a kid at heart, what can I say.

[Eugine]

Well then, that's bad lolz. Well, unless you want to write kid stories...

[Mallick]

I'm proud of him for simply getting someone to post in the FF forum after Icy's poetry.

[Eugine]

The artwork and fan fiction forums are basically dead lolz.

[Folcon]

My poetry tends to be written more simply than my stores. Most of my current stories, are definitely aimed toward a more mature audience. At least 16 and older, if not 18 and older. I might post excerpts from some of my stories aimed at all audiences though.

[Eugine]

Post em all.

[Mallick]

4th May 2008 - 10:05 PM
In: Ayeshee's poetry
Last post by: Icy


I used to laugh at that every time she told me to shut up. XD

[Lightning Star]

You laugh at the strangest things then. I see no humor in that at all. Not even anything to make fun of o.O.

Escout, just don't listen to those bastards. They wouldn't know creativity and good poetry if it was shoved up their ass.

[Folcon]

Thanks Icy.

[Laharl]

Icy, on May 20 2008, 07:50 PM, said:

Escout, just don't listen to those bastards. They wouldn't know creativity and good poetry if it was shoved up their ass.

did you study Poetry at university? no? SHUT UP THEN.

Constructive Criticism is the best way to improve your creative writing/poetry.

shame you get none of that here as everyone is too busy arse kissing

[Folcon]

And you would be the expert on constructive criticism.

[Laharl]

i can just flame you if you want, its much more entrtaining

[Folcon]

I'd prefer my topic stays flame free.

*installs sprinkler system*

[Mallick]

Icy, on May 20 2008, 11:50 AM, said:

You laugh at the strangest things then. I see no humor in that at all. Not even anything to make fun of o.O.

Escout, just don't listen to those bastards. They wouldn't know creativity and good poetry if it was shoved up their ass.

it was probably more the people telling me on msn that they urged to type tl;dr

[Lightning Star]

Laharl, I thought it was pretty obvious whom that post was aimed toward (aka not you). Though your sarcastic little remark about the edo period did seem to spurr on everyone else.

Laharl, on May 20 2008, 05:12 PM, said:

i can just flame you if you want, its much more entrtaining

*sigh* If you insist, but you're just one more person bringing this forum to a ruin. It's sad to see how this "flaming for fun" has become such a trend.

Anyways, I'd love to see the rest of your poetry, Escout.

[Eugine]

Icy, on May 20 2008, 09:18 PM, said:

It's sad to see how this "flaming for fun" has become such a trend.

omg, this is so true and so annoying. Sad.

[Folcon]

New poem up.

This one was basically inspired when I was sitting in a park staring at the clouds.

And yes, I'm aware that some of the rhymes are a little forced.

The Clouds go Drifting

As Joe sat and watched the sky,
As the clouds went drifting by,

He stared into the ocean blue.
And with the clouds his thoughts flew,

To a land he knew did not exist,
But its allure he could not resist.

For in this land your dreams come true,
No matter what you wish to do.

Nothing in this land is wanting.
But there is one important thing,

This land is merely made of dreams,
Nothing is quite as it seems.

You must remember nothing here is real,
No matter how good it makes you feel.

If you stay too long your mind is trapped,
Before long your life is sapped.

Joe forgot and his life is gone,
His body sits upon his lawn.

His body sits, no longer seeing the sky,
As the clouds go drifting by.




I'm also trying to use this poem as a basis for a short story I'm writing.

[Mallick]

Icy, on May 20 2008, 06:18 PM, said:

one more person bringing this forum to a ruin.

you're making yourself sound innocent

[Eugine]

Actually, Icy has done a good job at keeping this forum alive. One of my favourite members. I learn lots from her >.>

If I visited 4chan, probably I would have seen everything you posted on GSSF already...

[Mallick]

4th May 2008 - 10:05 PM
In: Ayeshee's poetry
Last post by: Icy



yep, forum is sure alive because of her

[Eugine]

The fanfiction forum is naturally ignored here >>

[Mallick]

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[Folcon]

Stop spaming my topic PDM.

[Eugine]

OMFG PDM!!!
Why the hell am I laughing? -___-
This honestly is exasperating and you need to stop.

[Mallick]

escout, on May 20 2008, 08:56 PM, said:

Stop spaming my topic PDM.

wat

[Eugine]

Someone plz put PDM on mod preview >.>

[Mallick]

wai

[Eugine]

Because um, you do not contribute nothing to most non-Common room topics honestly... Plus you're grating.

[Mallick]

I'd just make a new account.

[Folcon]

GTFO of my topic if you're going to talk about this.

[Mallick]

You only posted one shitty poem, be happy we're keeping your fuckin' topic alive.

[Someone Else]

He posted two actually.

They're good if a bit cliché. Better than a lot that I read. I'm a photographer though so I can't critique.

[Folcon]

Thank you WD. It's nice to have at least three people that have something nice to say about them.

[Mallick]

Wind Dude, on May 20 2008, 09:23 PM, said:

He posted two actually.

I didn't read either of them past the first few lines, so..

[Folcon]

Then you can't judge them. Read them or gtfo.

[Mallick]

The reason why I didn't make it past the first few lines is because the first few lines turned me off to the rest of the poetry, but I never said that because that's not a very nice thing to say!

[Eugine]

lol PDM. You really crack me up.

Anyway, I actually prefer the second poem, however basic they may be.

[Caael]

Eugine, on May 21 2008, 04:55 AM, said:

The fanfiction forum is naturally ignored here >>

Theres a reason.

escout, on May 21 2008, 05:25 AM, said:

Thank you WD. It's nice to have at least three people that have something nice to say about them.

I'm not going to say something nice about them if i dont ****ing like them, am I!

[Folcon]

Well if you can't say something nice, than STFU!

[Caael]

You cant expect to post some **** excuse for a poem and expect people to totally love it. You say you're 21? You have the mind of a 12 year old

[Eugine]

I have to agree that the writing is very, very basic. Escout you seriously need to express yourself better if you plan on having writing as a career...

[Folcon]

never said poetry was my focus.

[Mallick]

Then don't be such a defensive twat.

[Laharl]

Its Escout, it's what he does, its like complaining at a spider for spinning a web

[Caael]

Loving the analogy Laharl :D

But seriously, you cant expect to post something and hope everybody loves it because that's not the way the world works.

[King Hydros]

Honestly, you guys are so mean. I enjoyed the poetry, the first one wasn't my favorite,but I really liked the second one.

[Caael]

Put it this way: I'm not going to compliment something that is clearly crap just so somebody can get an ego boost.

[Folcon]

Well could you at least be more polite about it.

[King Hydros]

If you want to read crap, because of gramatical errors that are extremely stupid on my behalf then read my story:
http://www.goldensun-syndicate.net/forum/i...showtopic=11047

BTW I'm going to be writing another chapter soon, for any fans who want to know.

[Ironsight]

Advertising you fanfic in escout's topic isn't a good idea.

[Laharl]

indeed, that's what signatures are for

[Folcon]

Thanks a lot guys. All I wanted to do was share some of my writings with you and now you've gone and ruined it. So forget it, I'll just take my writings some place where they might be appreciated.

*reports topic requesting closure*