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I Wish A poem by me that I wrote 5 mins ago
#1
Posted 27 July 2004 - 01:15 PM
This a poem I wrote in about 3 minutes but.................
I Wish
I wish there was a land without sorrow,where everyone is happy about tomorrow.
If there was land that had no beer,no drugs,and no weapons,would that really be a better world?
If there was this land,there was this place,maybe once more a smile could be on my face.
I wish people could not worry about will we eat tomorrow,where everyone one is rich in heart and soul and sharing wouldn't take a toll.
if everyone would be like that we wouldn't have war on Iraq,we wouldn't have war at all,but sections like that here are very small,
If this place, this land were true I wouldn't be writing this poem to you.But this place does not exsist,but we all have the wish,
and if that wish is true,maybe that wish will come true.
I Wish
I wish there was a land without sorrow,where everyone is happy about tomorrow.
If there was land that had no beer,no drugs,and no weapons,would that really be a better world?
If there was this land,there was this place,maybe once more a smile could be on my face.
I wish people could not worry about will we eat tomorrow,where everyone one is rich in heart and soul and sharing wouldn't take a toll.
if everyone would be like that we wouldn't have war on Iraq,we wouldn't have war at all,but sections like that here are very small,
If this place, this land were true I wouldn't be writing this poem to you.But this place does not exsist,but we all have the wish,
and if that wish is true,maybe that wish will come true.
#2
Posted 03 August 2004 - 12:32 PM
nice! and also thanks for reviewing on my story...actually i am in the middle of the sequel...i just have a huge writers block (btw...this is an inside thing for all others)
i liked your poem...it made me think. (not like thats hard but hey!) ^_^ . ne ways, nice job!
i liked your poem...it made me think. (not like thats hard but hey!) ^_^ . ne ways, nice job!
#3
Posted 03 August 2004 - 02:07 PM
I wrote that right after reviewing pain by bearerofkukuimonji and wrote it ^_^
#4
Posted 03 August 2004 - 09:29 PM
awesome poem pdm! it made me think too...that made my head hurt :unsure:
#6
Posted 13 August 2004 - 12:32 PM
Thank you Lightningstar,Kate,and Metallix,I guess I might have a tiny bit of talent in my head,maybe not
#9
Posted 29 August 2004 - 04:51 PM
That is good. I don't even know how to write poems, but stories I do. That's agood poem.
#10
Posted 30 August 2004 - 06:27 PM
Good poem. I'd wish for a billion dollars but everyone want something else. :ph34r:
#11
Posted 30 August 2004 - 06:34 PM
Isaac13, on Aug 29 2004, 06:51 PM, said:
That is good. I don't even know how to write poems, but stories I do. That's agood poem.
I don't know how to write poems either.I wish I could though (oops another wish).That poem was just me sitting down using note pad and thinking a bit
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