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Final Bout

#1   BearerOfKikuichimonji 

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    Posted 27 July 2004 - 11:09 PM

    i clenched my fists
    i thought of all the pain he had caused me
    he was the last person on my list
    in just a monent, his life would cease to be

    how long had i been waiting for this
    this was where the torment would end
    i threw out my right fist
    then i saw his body bend

    he came back with a hard hit
    i kicked him in the chest
    this was not a battle of wit
    i knew we were both giving our best

    as he came to hit me again,
    i brought out my knife
    this was were the fight would end
    one stab in the chest, there went his life


    not as dark as PAIN, but i like it. whatta you guys think?

    #2   Iloverpgs 

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      Posted 27 July 2004 - 11:11 PM

      Wow how do you come up with these?

      #3   BearerOfKikuichimonji 

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        Posted 27 July 2004 - 11:21 PM

        hehe. i never really made a good poem before these two. am i actually good?

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          Posted 27 July 2004 - 11:27 PM

          It's good but how long did it take you?

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            Posted 27 July 2004 - 11:29 PM

            i'm not gonna lie, about 10-15 minutes ^_^

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              Posted 27 July 2004 - 11:31 PM

              Then I would say that's better than I could ever do because i'm not much of a poet myself :/

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                Posted 27 July 2004 - 11:36 PM

                well, like i said. all you need is inspiration. i find mine from everywhere. mostly songs ^_^

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                  Posted 28 July 2004 - 12:03 AM

                  Hmm songs never actually thought of that I always thought it came from just there head.


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