This is a twisted story of GS1, where Isaac is the one "drowning", No one is the main character and the main team is Saturos, Menardi, Alex and Marcus (a made up wind adept) is the team that tries to stop the power hungry Kraden.
-Prolouge-
One night in Vale a sudden storm surprises the whole village, what could it be?
Marcus looks out of his window and sees big rocks flying by. He goes out to see whats happening. Just as he goes outside the door a huge rock flies over him landing on his house. When he looks up whole of Mt. Aleph is erupting
Chapter 1: The Adventure
His friend Lucas shouts:
-Marcus, get over here its dangerous out there!!
-Lucas where are you?
-Right here! Follow my voice!
But just as Marcus starts walking towards Lucas he sees three figures walking down the Mountain.
-Hey! Who are there?
-Who are you talking to? Come here now!
-But theres someone there, maybe the have something to do with the storm!
-Ah stop it Marcus, u´ve been looking for adventures ever since Mt.Aleph reupted last year and Isaac and Garet left Vale! And besides Kraden warned us that Mt. Aleph could erupt anytime now that the Golden Sun is unleashed!
-Well, i guess your right! Theres nothing to worry abou.....!
A big ball of fire hits Marcus.
-Marcus!!
He turns around.
-Who are there?! Come forward so i can see you!
-Ah, another witness. what should we do with him?
-I dont know, what do you think Menardi?
-*Menardi, but... didnt she* ( * Means Lucas is thinking)
-Lets kill him Saturos!
-*Saturos to? But Isaac and Garet killed them last year..*
-Shut up both of you! Hes probably heard your names now!
-Sorry Alex, didnt mean to. Besides how could he know our names?
-Maybe hes a student at Kraden! And Kraden knows us!
-Oh, maybe that.
Satorus, Menardi and Alex steps forward.
-If it isnt Lucas, Alex says
-But...how...could...
-How we could survive? Well you see no one actually saw Satorus and Menardi here die, they just saw them fall down the arie right? And myself, well earth ate me up and i became part of it. That together with the power of the Golden Sun
has made me superior to you other creatures.
Marcus crawls up the hill.
-You see, we did not activated Mt. Aleph, believe me or not, Kraden did.
-Kraden?! No, i dont believe you!, Lucas says
Marcus crawls some more
-Now Lucas, i know that your a very good student of alchemy but if i dont end your suffering here, Kraden will at last so im sorry for this Lucas but.
Alex raises his hand.
-Grand Gaia...
A big hole opens up. Lucas falls in it but grabs a root
Now Marcus has gone up the hill again and sees Lucas
-Lucas!! Hold on!
-Its no use Marcus....
-Alex?! And Satorus?! And Menardi??!!! How?!
-No time for questions Marcus...
-Let the kid go marcus! We dont need him!
-No! Hold on Lucas!
-I....i...i cant..Marcus. Such power...*cough*....pulls me down......good...bye..
Lucas falls down the hole.
-Noooooo!!!!!
//To be Continued
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Thats the beginning of it! Please rate it!
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Posted 16 September 2004 - 11:17 AM
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Posted 16 September 2004 - 08:54 PM
looking good, post more soon!
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Posted 21 September 2004 - 08:52 AM
sounds pretty good so far. Post more and maybe add a little more detail like specific looks. Maybe say what the character is seeing or feeling. Good suggestions for my story indeed!
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Posted 21 September 2004 - 03:48 PM
*is eating popcorn while reading the story* Well done Nino...! Continue it soon...! *drinks tea*
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Posted 05 October 2004 - 10:22 AM
Exactly. continue it soon.... I WANT SOME POPCORN... oooo! It's raining popcorn... hey! quit throwing popcorn.... I said quit it! That's it. *whoosh* *smack* *thud* There. Take some of your popcorn... wake up soon, will ya? No? That's it, you're not my brother any more... that's right. Eh, *covers brother in popcorn that was thrown by him* there. wake up to popcorn. Hey! Is popcorn supposed to be green? This popcorn is poisoned... mmmmmm, poisoned popcorn... *munch* Why did I do that? *thud*
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Posted 05 October 2004 - 04:07 PM
Hmm. Good. Very good. Yes, but now, we must eat. Come, come.
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Posted 05 October 2004 - 05:16 PM
Awesome, Nino. Keep it coming *eats bananas, popcorn, king crag, beef, and candy.
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Posted 05 October 2004 - 05:30 PM
Gimme some popcorn! Please?
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Posted 05 October 2004 - 05:32 PM
*gives Isaac13 popcorn* There! Wanna make a smoothie with me?
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Posted 05 October 2004 - 05:37 PM
Hey, thanks! Sure I'll make some smoothies. *Munches on popcorn*
This is good!
This is good!
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Posted 05 October 2004 - 05:42 PM
All right, let's get started *takes out a 2 1/2 foot blender and adds strawberries*
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Posted 05 October 2004 - 05:51 PM
21/2 feet? That's big. Oh well. *Takes out other fruits and adds them into the blender* *Mess is created everywere*
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Posted 05 October 2004 - 08:56 PM
*adds onions and cayenne to the mix*
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Posted 05 October 2004 - 11:09 PM
You guys, are REALLY off topic. -_-;; Why are you doing an RP, when you can be doing that in the spam forums. @_@ this is for stories...not RP's you know...
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Posted 07 October 2004 - 10:21 AM
I understand stories taking time to make, but everyone is getting bored over here, that's the reason...
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Posted 07 October 2004 - 10:24 AM
Woah Nino brill story, you're really good:D
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Posted 07 October 2004 - 05:55 PM
Sometimes I like to go back and read the stories again. They're really good too.
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Posted 13 October 2004 - 05:00 PM
Yeah, your'e right. Quit getting off topic, gs.
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