I don't really consider myself a poet, but I just felt like I would try my hand at a piece of it. Here's my first piece of work:
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My life
You become my darkness
Your words are poison
Making my love a mystery
Riffs of darkness break through my ears
These harsh discords remind me of you
You are so close and so far away
Can't bring myself to your arms
Can't wake up from this sleep
I am one with the darkness
One with you
Resurrected.
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Posted 22 April 2006 - 11:49 AM
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Posted 22 April 2006 - 01:43 PM
You made two identical topics with different opening posts. What happened?
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Posted 22 April 2006 - 06:06 PM
There was some sort of SQL error so I tried again because I couldn't see that it had actually posted. I'm sorry if I caused confusion.
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Posted 23 April 2006 - 04:14 AM
I never really liked poetry, but this is quite good. Even if it doesn't rhyme. :o
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Posted 26 April 2006 - 04:22 PM
Not bad at all, you should write more ^^
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Posted 29 April 2006 - 01:03 PM
Here's another one...
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My dream
Becomes my nightmare
As you become my focus
Your presence makes it unbearable
I can't live without your love
Do not leave
Stay in my arms
Together we will die
And become my dream
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My dream
Becomes my nightmare
As you become my focus
Your presence makes it unbearable
I can't live without your love
Do not leave
Stay in my arms
Together we will die
And become my dream
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Posted 05 August 2006 - 11:12 AM
Ooh, that really isn't bad at all. *gives a silver star*.
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Posted 18 August 2006 - 05:16 AM
They sound good.. Except they're the same as every other damn piece of poetry on this god-forsaken internet.
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Posted 18 August 2006 - 09:12 AM
...No they're not.
My poetry aren't like that.
Very good, very touching SoT.
My poetry aren't like that.
Very good, very touching SoT.
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Posted 19 August 2006 - 03:23 PM
Actually. Yes it is. It writes about love and dying. It's freakin' emo! Look on any emos myspace. They'll have a piece of dodge poetry.
No offense SoT but it's not very original.
No offense SoT but it's not very original.
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Posted 19 August 2006 - 03:36 PM
It wasn't supposed to be. I just tried it. If you want to see what (I think) I'm good at, read my fanfiction.
No offense taken.
No offense taken.
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Posted 09 October 2006 - 06:37 PM
hey it dont have to rhyme. thats called free verse. and i thought it was pretty good
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Posted 10 October 2006 - 11:33 AM
I can't say I'm a big fan of any poetry, but it isn't too bad.
It's better than the rubbish we have to read in English.
It's better than the rubbish we have to read in English.
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Posted 10 October 2006 - 01:55 PM
School poetry sucks. And I might add that I wrote this stuff before I met my girlfriend. I'm sure if I were to write poetry now it would be much happier than this somewhat depressing stuff.
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Posted 12 October 2006 - 09:47 AM
Is there something up with your relationship? Whats so depressing about her?
Thats good SoT! I usually find that poetry is crap, but this is really good! n_n
Thats good SoT! I usually find that poetry is crap, but this is really good! n_n
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Posted 12 October 2006 - 10:42 AM
Read my last post carefully. I said my poetry now would be happy. I wrote this a long time ago, before I even met her.
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Posted 15 October 2006 - 04:25 AM
Ooooooooh I thought you meant before you went out to meet your GF.
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