Posted this somewhere else, but, I'll give me a thread on it, so I wont Bunch up Andross's thread.
I've wrote short poems of my own. I got good ratings in all the sites that they have been featured in. Note: not only that, but they deal with my religion. Ratings I was given are on the side, lol, I stored all this on notepad and had to edit/modify it so it would fit on this... Hopfully I did not acidentally delete/edit text...:
---LOST CROSS--- (9.5:10) "Very good and in depth to your beliefs, I like it."
I look up
You look down
Blood stained cross
On Holy ground
Nailed from hatred
Nailed for crime
His blood will stay
'Till the end of time
Look yet again
Down the row
Application of death
You and I know
---DEATH---(8:10) "A good one, yet, lacks a true statement. It's about death, I know, but, what I mean is that it lacks a bit if, zing, shall I say? Still good and you gave it a shot, I can tell."
Died and tried, toil of pain
Hated and burned
Foes are slain
As flames do turn
Death is awaiting
Is iT yOuR tUrN?
---SIN---(8:10) "Well, it's pretty good, but, like the one above, I don't see the true message and is hard to follow, good though."
What about Sin?
Why is it here?
Why shed the tear?
Why go through Fear?
Why ordain the near?
What about sin?
---Shattered Glory---(10:10)"Great all around! I understand the topic and I clearly see the message, overall, It's a perfect score and what deserves praise. Great all around"
You push and shove
Hate the love
Think your all great
A real first rate
But you know what?
Why the rut?
You think your grand
Every thing in demand
But look and see
You cannot feed
God's thunder will come
And you'll feel the run
Of shattered old glory
And the blast of the gun
Blow the trumpet
And you will see
Shattered old glory
Of life's little seed...
---CALL TO THUNDER---(8:10)"Very strange one you got here, Like the two eight scores I gave. This one, as good as it seems, is VERY hard to follow."
Call down the rain
Call down the wind
Call down the glory
Break it
Take it
Make it
Fake it
Call Down the rain
Call down the wind
call down the glory
Bury
The fury
In a hurry
It'll come out
Call down the thunder.
---Iron Cloth---(9:10)"Now, I understand the concept of this one here. It's clear, but not as good as 'Shattered Glory' but, it still deserves credit."
Cold
The hardness
The endurance
The forged power of the hearth
Warm
The softness
The warmth
The woven power of the heart
And to who does this comply
Every man shall live and die
Become angry or cry
For at the end of time
It will all fade
Only hope will last
MY NEWEST ONE ---FOREVER MAN---
What has MAN's Sanity brought us today?
Technology?
Indeed a great one.
But What else?
Not only trying to see man as a GOD
But they have PUSHED
SHOVED
PULLED
GRABBED
Told you what to do.
Said "In GOD WE Trust"
and try to take that from you.
Take a stand
because what we are is not GOD.
Here is where WE stand
ON Earth
We can be living eternal
If we choose the right Path
To Freedom, To GOD's Love
To Truth
Justice
Our Own Pursuit of Happiness
I Don't like the drama you bring
I want to stick to mine
Because who I stand for
is THE FOREVER MAN
I submitted these to some guy who rates stuff like stories, poems, and stuff. I put the rating he gave on each. I never got a chance to send "FOREVER MAN" in because I forgot the email when I got XP and when I found it, I found out it's not in use anymore. Oh well.
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#2
Posted 30 June 2004 - 02:27 PM
You can earn some money being a poet, I like them, especially the ones that rhyme.
#3
Posted 02 July 2004 - 02:35 AM
There was one I sent in, but, he gave it a 4/10, lol, so, I won't post it.
#5
Posted 02 July 2004 - 04:53 PM
Well, you can't now, the guy's email does not work, and he tore tdown the site. Poor me, he was kewl. lol. I'll try to find the link.
#6
Posted 15 July 2004 - 10:25 AM
hahahahahahahahahahhaaaa! that is so cool i never knew poems could be so not stupid.
#7
Posted 19 July 2004 - 01:40 AM
those were good. how did you do the copyright sign?I have been wondering for a longtime! But anyways very good work!
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