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Poems By Izar He is d4 coolies...

#1   Izar 

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    Posted 29 June 2004 - 11:12 PM

    Posted this somewhere else, but, I'll give me a thread on it, so I wont Bunch up Andross's thread.

    I've wrote short poems of my own. I got good ratings in all the sites that they have been featured in. Note: not only that, but they deal with my religion. Ratings I was given are on the side, lol, I stored all this on notepad and had to edit/modify it so it would fit on this... Hopfully I did not acidentally delete/edit text...:

    ---LOST CROSS--- (9.5:10) "Very good and in depth to your beliefs, I like it."

    I look up
    You look down
    Blood stained cross
    On Holy ground
    Nailed from hatred
    Nailed for crime
    His blood will stay
    'Till the end of time
    Look yet again
    Down the row
    Application of death
    You and I know

    ---DEATH---(8:10) "A good one, yet, lacks a true statement. It's about death, I know, but, what I mean is that it lacks a bit if, zing, shall I say? Still good and you gave it a shot, I can tell."

    Died and tried, toil of pain
    Hated and burned
    Foes are slain
    As flames do turn
    Death is awaiting
    Is iT yOuR tUrN?

    ---SIN---(8:10) "Well, it's pretty good, but, like the one above, I don't see the true message and is hard to follow, good though."

    What about Sin?
    Why is it here?
    Why shed the tear?
    Why go through Fear?
    Why ordain the near?
    What about sin?

    ---Shattered Glory---(10:10)"Great all around! I understand the topic and I clearly see the message, overall, It's a perfect score and what deserves praise. Great all around"

    You push and shove
    Hate the love
    Think your all great
    A real first rate
    But you know what?
    Why the rut?
    You think your grand
    Every thing in demand
    But look and see
    You cannot feed
    God's thunder will come
    And you'll feel the run
    Of shattered old glory
    And the blast of the gun
    Blow the trumpet
    And you will see
    Shattered old glory
    Of life's little seed...

    ---CALL TO THUNDER---(8:10)"Very strange one you got here, Like the two eight scores I gave. This one, as good as it seems, is VERY hard to follow."

    Call down the rain
    Call down the wind
    Call down the glory
    Break it
    Take it
    Make it
    Fake it
    Call Down the rain
    Call down the wind
    call down the glory
    Bury
    The fury
    In a hurry
    It'll come out
    Call down the thunder.

    ---Iron Cloth---(9:10)"Now, I understand the concept of this one here. It's clear, but not as good as 'Shattered Glory' but, it still deserves credit."

    Cold
    The hardness
    The endurance
    The forged power of the hearth
    Warm
    The softness
    The warmth
    The woven power of the heart
    And to who does this comply
    Every man shall live and die
    Become angry or cry
    For at the end of time
    It will all fade
    Only hope will last

    MY NEWEST ONE ---FOREVER MAN---

    What has MAN's Sanity brought us today?
    Technology?
    Indeed a great one.
    But What else?
    Not only trying to see man as a GOD
    But they have PUSHED
    SHOVED
    PULLED
    GRABBED
    Told you what to do.
    Said "In GOD WE Trust"
    and try to take that from you.
    Take a stand
    because what we are is not GOD.
    Here is where WE stand
    ON Earth
    We can be living eternal
    If we choose the right Path
    To Freedom, To GOD's Love
    To Truth
    Justice
    Our Own Pursuit of Happiness
    I Don't like the drama you bring
    I want to stick to mine
    Because who I stand for
    is THE FOREVER MAN


    I submitted these to some guy who rates stuff like stories, poems, and stuff. I put the rating he gave on each. I never got a chance to send "FOREVER MAN" in because I forgot the email when I got XP and when I found it, I found out it's not in use anymore. Oh well.

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      Posted 30 June 2004 - 02:27 PM

      You can earn some money being a poet, I like them, especially the ones that rhyme.

      #3   Izar 

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        Posted 02 July 2004 - 02:35 AM

        There was one I sent in, but, he gave it a 4/10, lol, so, I won't post it.

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          Posted 02 July 2004 - 04:04 PM

          Were are you submitting it to?

          #5   Izar 

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            Posted 02 July 2004 - 04:53 PM

            Well, you can't now, the guy's email does not work, and he tore tdown the site. Poor me, he was kewl. lol. I'll try to find the link.

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              Posted 15 July 2004 - 10:25 AM

              hahahahahahahahahahhaaaa! that is so cool i never knew poems could be so not stupid.

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                Posted 19 July 2004 - 01:40 AM

                those were good. how did you do the copyright sign?I have been wondering for a longtime! But anyways very good work!

                #8   Izar 

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                  Posted 19 July 2004 - 12:22 PM

                  Copyright sign? Where do you see that? In my fanfiction?


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