escout's poetry yes, I can write it
#1
Posted 19 May 2008 - 12:19 AM
The Art of the Sword
The art of the sword is a sacred thing,
To dance with one's blade, an art form.
I live by the sword; I die by the sword,
As I fight to defend those I love.
And get covered in viscera and gore.
When the battle is done, I go to the river
And wash the blood from my hands.
But the war still goes on.
A swordsman's life is never quiet,
His work is never done.
The art of the sword was once a sacred thing,
To dance with one's blade, an art form.
But no more,
years of war have left me barren inside,
I no longer feel love or joy.
I am no longer a hero in the people's eyes,
Just a killer, for now, and forever more.
I'll post another in a few days.
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Posted 19 May 2008 - 01:23 AM
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Posted 19 May 2008 - 01:26 AM
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Posted 19 May 2008 - 03:43 PM
#7
Posted 19 May 2008 - 05:07 PM
escout that was really basic for me lol. I like it kinda though...
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Posted 19 May 2008 - 05:21 PM
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Posted 19 May 2008 - 05:43 PM
#16
Posted 19 May 2008 - 05:44 PM
In: Ayeshee's poetry
Last post by: Icy
I used to laugh at that every time she told me to shut up. XD
#17
Posted 20 May 2008 - 12:50 PM
Escout, just don't listen to those bastards. They wouldn't know creativity and good poetry if it was shoved up their ass.
#19
Posted 20 May 2008 - 05:40 PM
Icy, on May 20 2008, 07:50 PM, said:
did you study Poetry at university? no? SHUT UP THEN.
Constructive Criticism is the best way to improve your creative writing/poetry.
shame you get none of that here as everyone is too busy arse kissing
#23
Posted 20 May 2008 - 06:25 PM
Icy, on May 20 2008, 11:50 AM, said:
Escout, just don't listen to those bastards. They wouldn't know creativity and good poetry if it was shoved up their ass.
it was probably more the people telling me on msn that they urged to type tl;dr
#24
Posted 20 May 2008 - 07:18 PM
Laharl, on May 20 2008, 05:12 PM, said:
*sigh* If you insist, but you're just one more person bringing this forum to a ruin. It's sad to see how this "flaming for fun" has become such a trend.
Anyways, I'd love to see the rest of your poetry, Escout.
#26
Posted 20 May 2008 - 08:54 PM
This one was basically inspired when I was sitting in a park staring at the clouds.
And yes, I'm aware that some of the rhymes are a little forced.
The Clouds go Drifting
As Joe sat and watched the sky,
As the clouds went drifting by,
He stared into the ocean blue.
And with the clouds his thoughts flew,
To a land he knew did not exist,
But its allure he could not resist.
For in this land your dreams come true,
No matter what you wish to do.
Nothing in this land is wanting.
But there is one important thing,
This land is merely made of dreams,
Nothing is quite as it seems.
You must remember nothing here is real,
No matter how good it makes you feel.
If you stay too long your mind is trapped,
Before long your life is sapped.
Joe forgot and his life is gone,
His body sits upon his lawn.
His body sits, no longer seeing the sky,
As the clouds go drifting by.
I'm also trying to use this poem as a basis for a short story I'm writing.
#28
Posted 20 May 2008 - 09:48 PM
If I visited 4chan, probably I would have seen everything you posted on GSSF already...
#29
Posted 20 May 2008 - 09:53 PM
In: Ayeshee's poetry
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yep, forum is sure alive because of her
#31
Posted 20 May 2008 - 09:55 PM
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#33
Posted 20 May 2008 - 09:58 PM
Why the hell am I laughing? -___-
This honestly is exasperating and you need to stop.
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Posted 20 May 2008 - 10:01 PM
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Posted 20 May 2008 - 10:04 PM
#41
Posted 20 May 2008 - 10:23 PM
They're good if a bit cliché. Better than a lot that I read. I'm a photographer though so I can't critique.
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Posted 20 May 2008 - 10:25 PM
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Posted 20 May 2008 - 10:27 PM
#46
Posted 20 May 2008 - 10:28 PM
Anyway, I actually prefer the second poem, however basic they may be.
#47
Posted 21 May 2008 - 09:54 AM
Eugine, on May 21 2008, 04:55 AM, said:
escout, on May 21 2008, 05:25 AM, said:
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Posted 21 May 2008 - 10:34 PM
#54
Posted 22 May 2008 - 04:05 PM
But seriously, you cant expect to post something and hope everybody loves it because that's not the way the world works.
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Posted 25 May 2008 - 11:44 AM
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#58
Posted 25 May 2008 - 10:26 PM
http://www.goldensun-syndicate.net/forum/i...showtopic=11047
BTW I'm going to be writing another chapter soon, for any fans who want to know.
#61
Posted 26 May 2008 - 01:28 PM
*reports topic requesting closure*