[pHantOm]

Pretty simple, Im partially emo and I write poetry. I like critisism, both positive and negative as long as its constructive and pertains to the poems. Replies such as

"poetry is g*y"

Is not constructive, and is infact rude. And please dont spam this thread....

Anyways :P

-Valentines Day-

Im sitting here in my cold dark room
Your gift from me is comming soon
One dozen roses and all the love I have
You are the only Valentine i've ever had
All I want is to not be lonely
When I dream of you, I feel so empty
There is no sound or smell, and I never hear your voice
Yet I smile, and couldnt be happier
Distance drowns me, as time holds me down
Only your smile gives me life, without it im gone
I jump in my car, with you in my heart
As I drive I feel you holding on tight
But the world pulls you away
I try to grab your hand
But I pass right through you
As you fade away and disappear

-That Lie-
That lie I told you
So long ago it seemed
That Lie I told you
So minor it was deemed
With every smile you gave
That lie dug me my grave
I spoke of truth and honesty
When I ignored my words blatently
You now hate me for what I had said
Im left alone to cry in my bed
When I commited my act of treason
My life lost all its reason
That lie I told you
Now in the open for you to hate
That lie I told you
Are the words that sealed my fate

-Forgiveness-
You turn your head as I try to speak
I watch as your mascara begins to streak
When I reach for your love
I am greeted with a shove
You begin to drift from me
Between us now lays a deep dark sea
Lost in these emotions I feel
That guiding light you now conceal
I speak my words in solitude
About our lives of fortitude
Your thoughts of sadness and despair
Those feelings you have we both share
To forfeit now would leave us broken
Our love for one another must be spoken

My most recent poems

[Mars Djinni]

Would you rather have this in Fan-created fiction? I could move it there if you wanted.

[pHantOm]

If you want, im not sure if it matters....

[Sea of Time]

I've never really been able to connect with "emo" poetry but this is actually very good. Very, very sad though, why doesn't anybody write happy poetry anymore?

[Laharl]

try your poetry without rhyme, because with it your restircted into putting stupid words in to keep it rhyming, you should decide the words that in your poem, they shouldn't limit you, pretty good otherwise

This post has been edited by laharl the slayer: 04 April 2006 - 02:56 AM

[Nemphtis]

Yeah, your rhymes aren't as "Whopee!" as mine. I think you should also try it without rhyming, or at least plan ahead so your rhymes don't feel so random.

[pHantOm]

Anubis, on Apr 4 2006, 12:13 PM, said:

Yeah, your rhymes aren't as "Whopee!" as mine. I think you should also try it without rhyming, or at least plan ahead so your rhymes don't feel so random.

I write whats on my mind, sometimes it rymes sometimes it doesnt. Ill give you guys a few other ones later when I go home when I can get them. The rymes arent really random though they make sense...perhaps I should translate? O_O

deem=opinion
Treason=betrayal
conceal=hide
streak=smear


Anyways the story behind the poems

Valentines Day I couldnt be with my girlfriend, and I was actually in trouble with my parents and sent to my room so I wrote. That was strictly how I felt and I didnt put any thought into it, I wasnt trying to ryme.

That Lie...I wont get into detail but I lied about something a long time ago and I later regreted it.

Forgiveness, we got in a fight at the mall. I actually just wrote that one yesturday I was just looking back on it.

Thank you for the replies so far :P

[Yuki]

O_O! Dude I'm so sorry I couldn't get back to you in time before you posted your poem x_X;

But!
I like it o.o I like it lots o.o;

It's ironic...Icy said that I was her inspiration to post her poems...and you asked me for advice :P sweet!

[in other words thank you for making my day better]

Your poems are REALLY nice. I'm glad that alot of people are now seeing poetry as not just what "emos" do, but as a true art form in which you can vent your true feelings in a beautiful rythm. They're awesome. Keep up the great...rhyming. xD

[Nemphtis]

Er, poetry was always about venting how you feel etc. Where have you been for the last few centuries? We only crack jokes about Emo's + Poetry because it's funny.

[Yuki]

Whatever Anubis x_x

And Phantom thank you because now you kind of cleared up my writer's block :P

[Laharl]

More Phantom More! I'll put some of mine up when i can be arsed, some of its emo, some isn't.

[pHantOm]

Thank you Yuki and friends. :lol: I try to ryme because my mind thinks in two part ryme beat I dont know why. Poetry has always been a past time of mine, ever since I was little when my mom told me to write my feelings down on paper. Lately I have been getting back into it alot, Yuki you posting your poems and me reading them made me think to start up again. Thanks alot all :D

This poem, is about me visiting Francesca for the first time since she moved.


-Away-

With your smile of joy in my head
I toss and turn in this lonely bed
Haunting my dreams are the days of the past
Where we thought it would always last
The final hours of our time together
Right there we swore it would be forever
I watched as you began to fear
Our love would be lost with every tear
The days at the pool were spent in ecstasy
Our smiles were glowing so pleasantly
The kisses that we loved to share
All could witness we didnt care
Alone together in my room
Where our desires began to bloom
Fulfilling every wish we had on mind
No longer could our love be confined
Right there we gave ourselves to eachother
Thats when we swore it would be forever
The time came when I had to leave
The days went by so fast I couldnt believe
I watched as you stood there helplessly
Turn back my mind says angerly
As your crys fell into the winds that past
I knew our love would always last

A little more...upbeat I suppose. :ph34r:

[Sea of Time]

Very romantic, much better than anything I could ever do.

Much more upbeat as well, not as "emo". Very good, can't wait to see more.

[pHantOm]

Sea_of_Time, on Apr 5 2006, 11:15 AM, said:

Very romantic, much better than anything I could ever do.

Much more upbeat as well, not as "emo". Very good, can't wait to see more.

:P Thank You :)

My next one might not be about my girlfriend though, my parents were being really lame last night so Ill probably be inspired by that.

[pHantOm]

I lied

I wrote a VERY romantic one in my eyes...

-Remember-

Remember the times we spent together
Each kiss seemed to last forever
The days spent in my hotel pool
Those little kids thought they were so cool
Holding your hand through every movie
With each smile you said you love me
We would wish the street lights would turn red
So we could kiss between each word we said
All those hours spent in the mall
That changing room seemed so small
On our first night we took a quiet walk
You looked so gorgeous I could barely talk
I loved those romantic showers in my hotel
Against eachother I loved it you could tell
On my bed we made love to one another
Never in our lives have we felt such pleasure
The last night together you slept so peaceful
We awoke and I had to leave how shameful
As I drove off I looked in my rear view mirror
Wishing I could wipe away your every tear
I swore it will not be the last time we will kiss
I will love you forever Francesca I promise

~Mark

[pHantOm]

-Losing You-
Every fight I cannot stand
I hate the feeling of my empty hand
With each sad word you hate to say
Six feet under is where I'll lay
Calling it over without a care
I sit silent with my tearfilled stare
Our memories going through my mind
Happiness in life I will never find
Past the point of no return
Your love I will always yearn
What have I done to cause this pain
The crys of this loss I cant contain
You are my lifes one obsession
My heart wishes for our once great passion
Without you now I'm so alone
Left to sleep with this quiet phone
Eternity I will have to wait
A lonely life forever is my fate